Name: justawillowtree (Signed) · Date: 17 Jul 2019 04:01 PM · For: Confession

MEG. THIS IS SO CUTE. <3

 

I love stories that are strictly dialogue, especially ones that have been pulled off as successfully as this one! The thing that I find really difficult about limiting myself to dialogue is being able to communicate like their surrounding details—for instance, where are they? What are they doing? What sort of expressions are they making? What’s their tone of voice like? But you accomplished this so well, I was so impressed! Like, I love how you established that, for one, they’re in their dorms, and that Scorpius is the most awkward, adorable young man to have ever graced the halls of Hogwarts (the use of ellipses and “erms” in this fic was absolutely perfect), and that Scorpius rolled his eyes at Albus lightly teasing him for mumbling.

 

I also loved the complete and utter panic that came through when Scorpius suddenly rushed through like a whole paragraph of speech, when the entire fic has basically comprised of single-lined dialogue hahaha. Albus really gave that poor boy such a shock with his reaction omg; the first thing he should’ve done was kiss Scorpius. Kiss first, talk later! That’s my golden rule for fanfictions haha. :P But this was adorable omg. All the little banter-y bits both leading up to the major confession, and then afterwards.

 

Rose is clearly a very intelligent person, I’m proud of her for making this happen! And I hope Albus and Scorpius go off, kiss for a bit, and then continue having a wonderful relationship together. <3

 

Eva

Name: TreacleTart (Signed) · Date: 29 Jan 2019 04:33 PM · For: Confession

Hey there!

 

I'm here with a review for the Magical Menagerie Review Event as well as the Gryffindor Red vs Gold Review event for January 2019! Back with another review for another one of your lovely stories!

 

Ooh. A story written with only dialogue! I think I remember when this challenge was going on, but I think it was before I was really active on the forums at all. I'm impressed that you did it. Telling an enitre story in only dialogue sounds very intimidating.

 

Aww. This is so cute. Poor Scorpius seems so nervous about admitting his feelings to Albus. I suppose it could be a worrisome thing as you don't necessarily know how the other person will take it. That being said, even if Albus didn't feel the same way, I doubt that he'd be a world class jerk about it.

 

Score one for Rose on giving solid advice! I'm glad that she encouraged Scorpius to speak up. If he hadn't, he might never have known that Albus felt the same way.

 

As for your concerns about it being easy to follow, I thought it was just fine. I could always tell who was talking. I thought the way you incorporated their names occasionally helped to keep it from getting too confusing.

 

Good job!

 

~Kaitlin

 

Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 18 Dec 2017 09:15 AM · For: Confession

Hey, Meg, my dear!


Dialogue only is an extremely difficult challenge (but a terrific writing exercise)! I think the biggest challenge is conveying emotion through speech as well as determining who's speaking without the use of dialogue tags and I really think you did an excellent job of nailing both of those things. I love how Albus can immediately tell something's wrong with Scorpius--they seem to have a pretty strong connection in this and I think that's fantastic! Scorpius' nervous and anxious rambling about his withheld confessions and Rose's advice is adorable--poor Scorpius seems like he's had to build himself up for this moment for a while, and it is probably one of the most terrifying things that he's ever done! He even tries to divert the conversation a little with a bit of weather small talk. That's probably something I would do, like, I have something serious I need to tell you but would you look at that rain! I loved how Scorpius immediately regretted his decision to tell Albus that he loved him without giving Albus time to process it. He's so panicky, and I can't say that I blame him at all! Intertwining a kiss was a really neat effect, especially given that you did it using only dialogue. This was sweet and fluffy and I loved it!


-Rumpels

Name: AbraxanUnicorn (Signed) · Date: 13 May 2017 10:19 AM · For: Confession

Hello lovely!

SQUEAL!!!

Ahem. Sorry. Just had to get that out there.

This story cropped up under the "Random Story" section on the archive and I couldn't resist checking it out. Dialogue stories are so hard to get right, but I think you've absolutely nailed it with this one! It's so perfect and adorable, and, though I'm more of a ScoRose shipper than a Scorbus one, this hilarious bit of conversation between the two hits all the feels and suddenly I don't have a care in the world about Rose! I can just picture awkward Scorpius lurking uncomfortably in the doorway of the dormitory, and Albus probably lounging on his four-poster, wondering what on earth is the matter with his friend.

I'm so glad I dropped by; this was SUCH a cute read! :)

Brax X

Name: abhorsen (Signed) · Date: 16 Dec 2016 02:06 AM · For: Confession

So this was adorable, and you made it super easy to follow. The anxiety and the "oh DAMNIT why did I say anything FFS" was just so on point. I have felt that way So Often, and like Scorpius, I always leap to that assumption immediately. (I think I actually once told a friend I was into them and then inadvertently ignored multiple attempts on their part to indicate that it was reciprocal. I am such a fail as a human being.)

 

I <3 you and your writing, you are the best.

 

Happy holidays!

Name: victoria_anne (Signed) · Date: 03 Nov 2016 04:08 AM · For: Confession

Hey Meg!

 

So I'm transferring reviews (as you know) and I was so sure I'd read this one, and when I checked I'd reviewed it as Squirtle, so that's all the review said, hahaha! I'd better leave a proper one.

 

Anyway, brilliant story. Sweet damn I love Scorbus. I did the dialogue challenge too so I know what a struggle it was, but I think you've done an amazing job. So much emotion came through even without dialogue tags, and that's not easy to do!

 

Sorrynotsorry for stalking! Love Bianca <3