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Oh, I love hearing about what everyone is busy working on during this horrid epidemic! I think one good side to Scorpius not having a specific job is that he gets to go around and experience what everyone is going through, which makes things really interesting for readers! I feel like by the end of this whole thing, he’s going to be randomly an expert in a bunch of different subjects, simply through osmosis hahaha. :P Also! He brought Rose tea!!! I like how he’s trying to brush it off as nothing, as though the other people simply don’t *want* to accept tea from him, but he caaares.
Aw, Rose just wants to talk to her mother. This is such a unique situation, but I really get how being under duress (particularly when you’re far away from home, like in college) suddenly makes you miss your mom a lot more. <3
OKAY I REALLY LOVE THE KNOCKER AND THE RIDDLES. I’m not sure if you’re coming up with these yourself, but they’re SO clever! I love how you show that it’s possible for non-Ravenclaws to answer the riddle questions, but also that it doesn’t come easy to them to stretch their minds that way. In particular, Scorpius’s neverending rage at the poor Knocker has me in stitches. :D
I’m really enamored by the shift in the dynamic between Rose and Scorpius! I don’t know how you did it! But somehow it’s oh so gradually shifted, so that now it’s no longer petty or malicious, but rather good-natured and teasing! I am all for this new level of interaction; I think it suits the two of them much better. I love seeing smiles on their faces. <3
WHAT IS HAPPENING AT THE END THOUGH. PLEASE PLEASE LET THE INGREDIENTS BE OKAY. WHERE DID THE REDCAPS COME FROM??? AHHH.
(Such a good chapter!)
Eva
SELENA IS AN ICON. She really stole the show this chapter! From her seemingly nonchalant hair-dressing in the morning; to her casual friendly acquaintance with Harley, perhaps the grumpiest House Elf I’ve ever seen; to her helpful asides in conversations! She’s so cool. I am so thrilled that she’s a part of this story -- I think she’s fast becoming one of my favorite characters! I mean: “but sometimes things will fall into my head despite themselves” A QUEEN. I so admire her dedication to ignoring information, yet having this information just conveniently plop into her brain, stored for future usage.
HERMIONE GRANGER TO THE RESCUE. I’m not gonna lie, I took a massive breath when I saw that it was Hermione’s Patronus! And I’m so glad that Patronuses do work, like I guessed a few chapters ago!!
“Darkness,” says Scorpius “ominously” in response to Hermione’s highly important question about what’s in the Forest ksdlhgs I love him, he’s so unhelpful but in the most dramatic of ways. And Lockett is truly someone I want to know better; she seems so much more competent than she lets on, and that makes me wonder if something happened in her career to greatly dissolve her confidence in herself?? I love Hermione’s outspoken support for her, though! Pleased me to no end. <3
I wonder why Lockett always seems to ignore Scorpius when it comes to responsibilities. Is it because of his trouble-making in her classroom? :P
This is such a good story omg, I love it so so much.
Eva
Oh my goodness, everything about this chapter is incredible. Rose’s relationship with Matthias is really interesting! I think we’ve all been in a place where we crave a specific kind of emotional intimacy with another person, and she seems to be really missing it. I understand her feelings a great deal -- obviously it’s not the best time, since she’s still dating Hector, technically -- but I do understand. I hope that eventually she’ll be able to sort out her priorities and break up with Hector, so she can be with someone who DOES provide that intimacy. Preferably Scorpius. :P Though the “infidelity” tag is definitely making me nervous, I’ll keep my fingers crossed that she doesn’t cheat in this time!
“the grin died just as suddenly, and despite herself she noted the room seemed darker for it” -- THIS QUOTE. I LOVE THESE GLIMPSES INTO THEIR EMOTIONS. She is totally fond of Scorpius’s smile, enough to notice strongly its absence! And along the same vein, the way that she completely was able to read his smiles throughout the chapter made my heart want to sing! Particularly at the end, when she realizes he’s completely BSing her because of how stupidly confident his smile is.
The entire House Elf negotiation scene is utterly priceless! Even though I am generally not in favor of manipulating formerly oppressed workers through sneaky contract clauses, I still found myself very impressed by Rose and Scorpius’s ingenuity. However I am still incredibly fond of Harley, and I really really hope the house elves can be paid retroactively for their involvement! Because they’ll have to cook for so many people, and care for so many people, and essentially return to the services that they’d only recently escaped.
I love Rose and Scorpius terribly, and you write them unbelievably well. I’ve never met such a snarky, quick-witted Scorpius!!! I love your version of him so so much.
That scene when Rose just straight-up attacks him in the files room is SO funny. She’ll make a great duellist someday, I feel. :P AMAZING CHAPTER.
Eva
I wonder, would it be theoretically possible for Hogwarts students/teachers to communicate with the outside world using Patronuses? Of course, Hogwarts students probably aren’t terribly familiar with the charm, but what about Lockett (at least once she pulls herself out of her room)? Letting Rose handle all the complicated notation of the current state of things just seems far too much for any teenager to handle! I feel bad for her, she’s doing so much! It’s so frightening how quickly this disease ravaged the entire Hogwarts population. I really wonder how they’re ever going to combat this.
A HOUSE ELF FOREMAN. THAT’S AMAZING. I am all for this house elf reclamation of their rights/powers to be honest -- I think Scorpius had a really good idea, going to ask the house elves for help, but I really can’t blame them for not helping! As a species that was used by wizardkind as slaves for forever, I definitely understand why they’re not terribly happy about being demanded to help wizardkind without pay again. I wonder if Scorpius could somehow figure out a way to recompense them for their troubles?? But wow I do love Harley. :’)
AMAZING CHAPTER.
Eva
NO, NOT HUGO. I’ve become so fond of him, and his stupid adventurous bravery! I can’t believe he’s only fourteen and he’s trying to help save Hogwarts -- that’s my youngest sister’s age, and she’s a baby! Utterly incompetent! So I’m particularly fond of Hugo, but I should’ve realized that returning to the place where the disease likely first manifested itself would’ve caused the non-immune child to get sick. Please please please don’t let him die, because I soon suspect that this disease will quickly start becoming fatal. D:
Anyway, I haven’t yet commented on your chapter titles! But they’re so good and funny! I love all the heat-related puns and jokes; they always make me really happy to write down on my reviewing document! :D
I LOVE the way Methuselah speaks. He doesn’t even bother speaking in complete sentences, that’s how much he seems to dislike interacting with people haha! And yet he remains so utterly vicious, but in the nerdiest of ways. (For instance, Scorpius being relegated to “prey” is the funniest thing I’ve ever read.) He’s such a fab OC, and I love you write him!
The dementors were so scary oh my god, I don’t know why they’re there or how they happened to even get there in the first place, but that was a frightening moment. You wrote their lethargicness and depression upon the approach of the Dementors SO well that I was finding it difficult to breathe myself! That whole section was so deliciously creepy, with the sun-less patch of the woods. I LOVE IT ALL.
Hugo is brilliant and I love him and I want him to be safe!
Eva
Andrew Garfield pulls off the nerd look SO well -- seeing him in Methuselah Jones’s chapter image absolutely delighted me. He’s a little more good-looking than I would’ve expected from Methuselah, but I can still see how it fits really well! What a good faceclaim. :D
Everything is such a nightmare in this omg. I was just imagining what life would be like if the coronavirus was this catastrophic -- I mean, it already is, I suppose, just on the Muggle scale of things haha -- and it would be utterly frightening. What’s simultaneously really good and bad about this situation is that it’s contained to Hogwarts, but because Hogwarts is such an easy place for communicable diseases to spread, it’s kinda frightening. It’s like the present-day fears about universities and dormitories being ways to just spread the virus faster.
It must be so so stressful for Madam Pheasey -- she’s the only medically-minded individual in the school, and there’s not enough time for her to figure out how to prevent the disease from spreading, since it catches so quickly. Like, in my head I kept automatically screaming “SELF-ISOLATION” but that wouldn’t really work with a magical disease like this, would it? I am curious about how it spreads -- is it skin-to-skin contact? Airborne? None of the above?
To me Madam Pheasey kinda represents all the troubles of healthcare workers in the world right now, how they’re risking their lives to keep other people alive and well. It made me so so sad when she was discovered ill!
EVERYTHING’S A MESS AND I AM STRESSED. LOCKETT BETTER GET HER BUTT OUT THERE -- I bet she’s immune, as all the Forbidden Forest people are, so it would definitely be helpful to have a professor who’s not going to become ill. Poor Rose, trying to handle everything by herself! I’m amazed at how well you captured the panic of a pandemic -- it’s unbelievable how well-written this story is, I love it so much.
The only good news I can see is that no one has actually died yet, and I do hope I didn’t just jinx it. :P
Oooh, also, I loved that Ravenclaw knocker riddle haha! Unfortunate that Scorpius doesn’t have the advantage of seeing the question in writing -- after I looked it over a few times I finally got it, but it’s brilliant! Love it. <3
Eva
THE OPENING BIT OF DIALOGUE [SCREAMING] THEY CARE FOR ONE ANOTHER! FEELINGS! HUMAN EMOTIONS! “Ugh, you manage to go from unconscious to obnoxious in a flat second” and “I should know, I pay close attention to these crinkles” are two lines that I think will remain in my consciousness forever. They’re so funny and cute and charming, and I am incredibly excited and fond to discover that Scorpius does not, in fact, dislike Rose as much as he lets on, considering the amount of time he’s apparently spent studying her face??? Lots to scream about here!
“[Hector] must have stolen it off a particular upset first year” -- Scorpius is so brutal omg. He does not care in the slightest about Hector’s forlorn face, nope! I do admire that devotion to nemesis-ness hahaha. I feel like so much of his irritation towards Rose comes solely from the fact that she’s with Hector, a fact I’ve really picked up on this chapter. I was quite heartened when he felt apologetic to Rose, though, because he does seem to instigate a lot of the unfortunate confrontations, and to see him feel sorry for it this time...that’s definitely improvement!
Oh my goodness, in my last review I forgot to mention Methuselah and Selena! Never in my lifetime did I expect to consider them as a pairing, but now I’m oddly delighted by the prospect? They’re both so odd in their own ways -- Methuselah in his (hilarious) nerdy fashion, and Selena...slightly dumber haha. But I empathize with Selena a great deal; I too have trouble remembering what day of the week I’m living through. :P
WHAT HAPPENED TO MIRANDA. How did that weird flashing light connect to the castle! Are the bodies of Scorpius, Albus, Rose, and other people from the Forbidden Forest that night hosts for whatever this plague is? It sounds so so nasty.
Here is where we enter the particularly relevant portions of the story, haha! I’m so intrigued to see where this epidemic goes! <3
Eva
!!! WHAT. WHAT IS HAPPENING, I MUST KNOW. There was so much thrill and tension in this chapter omg -- you have such a versatile way between genres, between the sharply humorous chapters from before and now this more plot-centric, mystery-based story! It was astonishingly brave of Scorpius to head directly towards the source of the campfire; I know that if I were him, I probably would have cowered in a tree until it was time to go home. :P BUT WHAT WAS THAT LIGHT. I imagine it must be somehow related to the plague that strikes the school, but how? I’m so curious!
Albus truly was amazing, earlier, dragging his friends along in the pitch black. I was reading that section while clutching my chest hahaha. It’s SO hard to run when you have no idea what’s in front of you!! I literally can’t even do that within the comfort of my familiar home! Even when I know there are no suspicious low-hanging bars or branches to thwack me on the forehead, I inch forward slowly like a fool, so I am so unbelievably impressed with Albus and his ability to withstand all that. Must be something about the Beater build haha.
That moment between Scorpius and Rose??? It actually reminded me quite a bit of the troll situation from HP1, how in the most frightening of experiences, one cannot help but bond with an enemy (or somewhat childish nemesis, as in the case of Hermione :P). The handholding made me gasp!
I’d also like to know, where does Scorpius get all his wit?? And can I borrow some please? :P I love how he’s in detention and he’s still snarking back at the professor like he’s immune to more punishment, it amuses me so much.
AMAZING. <3
Eva
SLKDGHKSL it is so funny to me that Lockett is so unbelievably fed up with these kids that she’ll dispatch them off to the dangerous Forbidden Forest to replace Potions ingredients. I love her??? I think she’s such an epic professor OC, and I dearly hope that she’ll crop up often in the following chapters!
Also, we get to see Rose’s POV for the first time!! Which is so exciting! I love the difference between her perspective/voice and Scorpius’s -- hers actually seems quite a bit breezier, generally speaking, which I think says a lot about the way Scorpius perceives her vs. the way Rose acts around people with whom she’s more comfortable. For instance, her whole conversation with her dormmates was really kind of endearing to me; she’s not as vicious about Scorpius when he’s not right there in front of her face, but she’s not pretending to be kind about him either. And somehow it shouldn’t have surprised me that Scorpius is considered quite the catch by some ladies! :P It just seems to utterly escape his notice, so I was initially astonished by the discovery hehe.
Anyway, I really really love Rose! I love the nuance you give your characters and how they feel about each other! She almost seems shallow at times -- giving up intellectual conversations for the hunkdom that is supposedly Hector? Very, very interesting!
I would truly like to borrow Albus’s kicked puppy expression, because it seems so utterly effective.
I wonder what shenanigans will occur in the Forbidden Forest! :P
Eva
I LOVE ALBUS. He goes through so much between both Scorpius and Rose omg; they put him through so many trials and tribulations hahaha. His closing speech to Scorpius was genuinely powerful to the point where I almost found myself nodding along in agreement. But it’s true! Scorpius made his bed by not attempting to fight back against the rumors in the slightest -- even if he felt that he had good reason not to -- so he needs to either (1) change his perceived reputation amongst the school or (2) deal with the situation best he can without blowing things up in Rose’s face. I would like to repeat, I love Albus so much.
Rose is definitely no saint, either -- she seems to take genuine pleasure in Scorpius’s suffering, which is an unpleasant quality in everybody! But from her perspective, if she truly believes that Scorpius is a cheating lowlife, I can see why she would feel pleased if he happens to mess up on a potion, as she originally assumed.
The way he planned the prank against her was incredible though. Even if it turned out to be on the immoral side of things (particularly with the wasting ingredients; I am not a fan of wasted materials :P), at least he didn’t HURT anyone, and I adored the secretive planning with the back-up potion and all of that!!! It was so cleverly written, so I was engaged from beginning to end.
Poor Albus, though, with his sense of right and wrong. It’s unfair for the professor to have criticized him for not taking sides -- he seems like the kind of person who’s good at seeing serious faults in both parties, so it must’ve been hard for him to pick a proper side knowing the backstory. I love him! I want to give him a great big hug, for all the times he was concerned while Scorpius was off doing his potions shenanigans. :P
Such a good chapter!
Eva
Oh, I love this characterization of Scorpius so much! He’s so bitter yet sardonically funny, angry yet emotionally conflicted. I love it! It creates this delicious drama, and I am completely here for it.
I really want to know the details behind what went down his seemingly nasty break-up with Miranda -- he seems really sure that he’s not going to come out the good guy even if the truth comes out, and I wonder why? It seems the rumor that’s been spread around is that he cheated on her numerous times, so I wonder if that’s the reverse of what actually happened? Maybe he means that people will always find a way to blame him -- I can imagine people thinking it’s “his fault” for driving Miranda to cheat.
But I’m just speculating! :D
Whatever the answer is, it seems twisted and awful, and I’m really sorry that he has to suffer through the unfortunate outcome of that. I feel like most of us have met serial liars in our lifetime, and they’re always so toxic and manipulative. Just the way Miranda was initially described gave me hives eep!
I love the animosity between Scorpius and Rose! I think that’s gonna be great fuel for a highly-charged relationship in the future. :D
Eva
Hi, hi! I was brought here by Renee (MuggleMaybe), who recommended this to me when I asked for well-written multi-chapters!! And I’m already finding the premise super interesting (and relatable, considering we are, amazingly, in the midst of quarantine), so I’m really excited to get into this story! :D
I am so amused by the image of Scorpius ramming through poor first-years like an out-of-control human-sized bowling ball. Albus is a bundle of sunshine, and I am already ready to defend him with my life! Even if he puts Scorpius in chokeholds :P I really loved the train of thought that Scorpius had here: “then wondered if the Boy Who Lived could have also been built like a Beater if he hadn’t spent his childhood in a cupboard.” That’s so fascinating??? I’ve never thought about it before, but that would make so much sense!
Harry being (or trying to be) a secondary father figure to Scorpius made my heart melt, and I think it’s truly amazing that you’ve managed to make me connect with these characters so soon after beginning the story! The tension between Scorpius and his father is patently clear, and I am all for this interpretation of Draco’s character post-war -- it’s been a while since I’ve seen him unreformed (at least as far as I can tell), and so I am so excited to see what you do with this!
“‘Methuselah’, which wasn’t a name you gave a child unless you wanted them to sprout fully formed and aged eighty from their mother’s womb” -- I SNORTED. This is such a fabulous line omg. Methuselah, which is truly an unfortunate name, sounds like a Percy Weasley 2.0.
Your writing is so funny, and I love your dialogue!!! I’m so excited to read more of these chapters! <3
Eva
Hi! I am here to review for the April 2019 Capture the Flag team Gold.
I simply loved the line about Scorpius looking like a wretched goblin, starved for attention. In fact, this whole description of the Slytherin Common Room is nicely done. It sounds luxurious and a bit mysterious.
Things seem tense between Scorpius and Albus in this scene. Why is Albus buckling down, I wonder? Is it just that he’s close to graduating and adulthood, or is it something else? And why is Scorpius still action so nonchalant?
The idea of Rose Weasley breaking up a party with booze is pretty funny. And that her boyfriend then stayed to consume said booze. I wonder how long they are going to last.
And, what went on with Miranda and Scorpius? Was it serious? Why did it end? I did think his reaction to his ex-girlfriend’s friend was pretty funny—that he can’t stand her now that he doesn’t have Miranda to distract him from her.
Ooo, this is an interesting moment with Miranda. What on earth happened between them and what are they trying to make happen now? Are they just fighting with each other? Are they just trying to hurt each other? Are they sorry it’s over?
Goodness, after that conversation with Scorpius and Albus I’m even more curious to know what happened. Why would it have this polarizing effect at the school too?
Hmmm, curiouser and curiouser. Did things get rough between Miranda and Scorpius? Why doesn’t he want anyone to know the truth?
Lots of questions! Nice chapter.
Yours,
Noelle
I'm back and obsessed with this story and your characters. I feel really bad for Scorpius, he's clearly going through a rough time of things post-break up and this Miranda sounds like a piece of work. What on Earth did he get accused of? Clearly whatever it is, Rose won't be happy - "Besides, if the truth came out, you know you'd have to do fifty rounds with Weasley." - That's rather interesting, so I'll be looking for that when the truth eventually spills. I wonder why he and Rose are so hostile... Is it a bit of rivalry like Ron joked about in the epilogue? It is a shame Albus is in the middle of their bickering.
I like that Albus just knew things weren't good and went after his friend following the Miranda confrontation, despite having work to do. He seemed to know a fly would help get Scorpius to open up a bit. They're clearly such good friends and know each other's quirks.
My favourite was:
‘Some day, Scorpius, people are going to realise that you're a good guy after all.'
‘I want to be there on that day.' Scorpius flung his broom to the right, and punched the Quaffle away from Albus' latest, heavily distracted strike. ‘It'll be really cool to see it rain fire.'
It was all so beautifully written and I'm just off to devour the rest of it!
Tasha xxFor Gryffindor's CTF - Team Gold
Hi! I am here to review for the April 2019 Capture the Flag.
I want to start by saying that this is one of the most appealing Next Gen story that I have read thus far. Your Scorpius is so cool, confident, and self assured. I love his banter, how he carries himself, how he is studying the madhouse that is leaving for the new school year and his thoughts about all of it. I adore that he plays the guitar—why wasn’t there more about the arts in JKR’s books? I’ve wondered whether or not students at Hogwarts participated in art or music, and I’m glad to see here that Scorpius has taken up an instrument—even if it is mostly to annoy his father.
This brings me to my first question: why is Draco not there to see off his son, and why is Scorpius wanting to keep his father hidden?
What a great choice it was to make the gang that Scorpius encounters a group of Hufflepuff toughs. It’s so fun to see some playing against type here. I loved your description of the muscle-bound Hector Flynn. He was spot on and I had to laugh at the thought of him trying to compete in witty repartee with Scorpius. It’s also interesting that he’s dating Rose Weasley. And is Scorpius interested in Rose as well? Hard to say at this point.
The picture of Al being so burly and coming to back up Scorpius was another fine one. I love the pair that these two make.
Scorpius seems to be working very hard to be all things to all people. He banters with the other students, tries to please the girls, tries to please the Potters and the Weasleys—it seems a bit exhausting. I wonder who he is really and who sees his real self. It’s nice to see Harry take an interest in Scorpius, even if Scorpius wants to blow the older man off. And I giggled at the moment when Scorpius notices the similarities between Hermione and Rose. Two peas in a pod indeed.
I felt sorry for Scorpius when he is alone on the train. Al has to go off with the prefects and he is left to fend for himself. It becomes clear then that he doesn’t have that many friends after all—as aloof as he acts. The bit about Methuselah was hysterical—that with that name he must have been born at the age of 80.
I loved the part when Scorpius overhears Rose talking about another boy being a better kisser than Hector. And it’s so interesting that her favorite thing about Hector a[appears to be that he’s kind of dumb and ‘easy to manage.’ I suspect that Rose can do much better, and I hope she will by the end of the story.
All in all, a nice start! I like how you laid a good foundation. Scorpius is especially well delineated in this chapter and I want to know him better. Nice work!
Yours,
Noelle
I've been meaning to stop by this story for the longest time, so here I am! I already love this, so, so much!! Your characters are amazing and I think the contrast between Al and Scorpius is perfect. Al's the level-headed one who tries to keep the peace and Scorpius is the cheeky one, who seems to really like the ladies - though it seems some of them don't really like him all that much if those choccies are anything to go by!
I adored the interaction between all the families on the platform and how they really didn't know what to do with Scorpius. It makes a bit of a change from the two best friends living in each other's pockets in the holidays and I really loved that aspect. I especially liked Harry telling him he was glad he was Al's friend - I feel like he could tell home life wasn't the best and of course, Harry knows exactly how that feels. Also, I liked that he plays the guitar, it just seems like an interesting character quirk to have and a rather unusual one for a pureblood, being a muggle instrument.
I thought this whole chapter was beautifully written and loved that we got to know your characters so well already. I'm really looking forward to seeing how Rose thaws and begins to warm to Scorpius, especially after that ending!
I also LOVE that this is set to be a trilogy as it means I have LOADS more to read and I can't wait! Great job!
Tasha - Gryffindor CTF - Team Gold xxx
Much progress after disappointment with Rose and himself after rant against Albus. It's a great relief for Scorp, there Lockett cleared she could be trusted for everything related to curing mental (?) disease affected by dementors or the curse Thane cast. And she gave even advice to let him trust himself without minding judgement from the others.
I wonder whether Astoria would have sent a letter to Scorp if Draco had informed her what was going on at Hogwarts.
Selena is hard to describe who she really is, I mean she is wise enough to let Scorp do useful things for others despite the fact he didn't think so, rather he thought she had almost no brain to understand Jones or his theory. As a result, thanks to Selena's instruction, Scorp found his place, for the first time (putting aside Acromantula's skin), I think he felt he could do something useful for his friends.
A great chapter, always.
It is wise you focused on Scorp's angst about Rose's determination for Hector, considering over Harry-Dean-Ginny, the triangle in J.K.Rowling's sixth book.
I am happy around the first spot, Hermione's patronus showed Harry and Ron were near her and told the survivors at Hogwarts what Harry and Ron said.
You conducted both Rose's thought and emotion in this chapter excellently including description about Hector. And the latter half was carefully written sparing lots of space for wild Scorp's rant. Albus Potter's reaction against him reminds me the predicament Harry suffered against Ron in his fourth year at Hogwarts.
Though the question why Thane chose to let them go is still unanswered, it's a great relief Scorp and Rose could report about their secret mission for Acromantula's skin.
I remembered Snape reading the spot how Lockett reacted to their explanation. Gradually I could imagine her characteristics as I read your story.
As so many Scorose fictions are seen in the fanfiction world, your writing style gives us fresh new impression about the ship. Small amount of romance is good enough after adventurous or action, a good one.
I really like how you wrote Albus in this chapter. His words, his behavior reminds us of his father.
A great chapter, always.
Wow, this chapter has a pack of adventurous scenes. Reading, I remembered J.K.Rowling's Prisoner of Azkaban. The process how Scorp and Rose are going on a hunt for Acromantula skin is well written. I remember the Hippogriff's flight of Harry and Hermione in the third book, I felt it a little romantic, so I feel in the same way about the spot the emotion popped in Scorp's mind while Rose held him tight on the broom.
Their searching scene is terrific. I sped up my reading pace so fast that I might miss a few spots while reading through to the end. I never expected Thane would appear so early in front of them. Reading their conversation, despite Scorp's accusation, I feel like Thane may be not a bad person, he observed them and gave them a helping hand while their effort would likely to end wastefully or they were going to be killed by Acromantulas.
oh well, I seem to have been skipping two chapters before I realized I should have been back to the previous chapter... anyway, I figured out what Hermione told Scorp about Lockett's past. It seems that Lockett had her reason for getting involved in the case which let her send her colleagues to Azkaban.
Finally, Scorp had a chance to kiss Rose and she had a feeling towards him as well. I feel like reading what emotion she had at that moment.
The episode that Hermione overlapped Harry and Ron in Albus and Rose is very impressive. I like the idea that she trusted Scorp beliving what Harry told her about him.
It's sad to read Scorp's angst again at the conversation with Hermione. On the contrary, I like the spot, the team work, Scorp and Harley. I hope the symptom won't get worse.
oops, I was skipping to the next chapter by accident, my real life... yes, I noticed my mistake after I read a few lines in the next chapter.
The guy's past was revealed. I am sure Prometheus had survived and Scorp was right.
As I read some hints in the next chapter, there are two points I noticed about the cause of the curse : spelling or potions. The process to invent new magical logic based on J.K.Rowling's world must have cost you much energy. I wonder how long and far you had prepared before writing.
Rose's attitude towards Scorp is changing little by little, the pace is good without rush.
Poor Scorp. He could only get a disappointing message from Draco after the hardship, even if his parents going abroad. Wait... I expect they will give him information about Prometheus later, hopefully they are travelling to the southern America. Anyway, I was thrilled at the famous map which appeared from Al's delivery. I had expected it would be Harry to offer a help, but it's satisfying that James sent it.
A great chapter, always.
As Scorp respected Lockett, Lockett also understood him as well. I like the relationship between the student and the teacher. She knew what was great in his characteristics and voiced it out as a kind of compliment in her way.
Selena is getting an important role as the story goes, she let Rose recognize the truth about Scorp and Selena got closer to Jones. I predict new romance is happening...
Finally, Scorp found he could be useful for everyone. Nine children, the answer of the riddle, I almost could guess, but an axe... ?
The name of the winner of 2009 Duelling Club Champion is named after one of Greek Gods. The background story of the god is dreadful to imagine. So many chapters to go. I expect the golden trio will enter later or soon to solve the case?
Just very impressed by the last dialogues between Rose and Albus. I wonder the sixteenagers in real life could exchange such an intelligent conversation like them. I mean I like how you ended this chapter with lots of emotions, caring each other. So beautiful.
Back to the first half of this story. Much progress from Scorp's memory. I am so excited the mystery was partially revealed. As the title says, I have burning questions right now. Why were they afraid of Harry Potter's son and his relatives? Are the culprits completely on the bad side or just reckless warlocks who were obsessed with the experiment using ancient magic?
What is fascinating in your story is that, I repeat again, the protagonist is not a perfect hero. Scorp often does stupid things from Rose's aspect, however, he did try his best, which we feel for him. A great chapter, always.
This chapter is really good with action scenes and thrill.
It's good that the protagonist is not a super hero. Scorp tried to exceed the Redcaps, but he failed, which we can enjoy reading.
I like how you described Albus, who was not a perfect hero, too. But he knew when to give up and retreat, and you wrote his green eyes to show his determination effectively, I am very impressed.
However Scorp didn't give up, though it was reckless, he tried his best and ended in self-hit, embarrassing state, as a result Rose came to help him. That's a nice plot, always.
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