Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 13 Aug 2018 09:28 PM · For: Firestorm

Hey, Kaitlin! O/

 

Even without dementors, Azkaban sounds creepy. It's really awesome that Scorpius became a lawyer (or whatever the magical equivilent of laywer may be). The McNair girl, Antoinette, sounds like she's a pretty nice person -- it makes me incredibly curious as to what she's in prison for (especially since that prison is Azkaban). The first thing that comes to mind is that she did something minor but because of her family name it was blown out of proportion. Either that or she's a little twisted, as lightly as she seems to be taking everything.

 

I also really enjoyed the concept that Draco (as well as other Pure-blooded families to their children) is trying to get Scorpius "on the right path" because it might make up for all the indescretions that they were responsible for during the war. While it might not make up for anything, setting him on a good path in life is still a good idea.

 

I'm super curious to learn about what Lily did. It must be really difficult feeling as though you have to live up to your parents names, but Scorpious does bring up a point that she doesn't actually have to do those things to make Harry and Ginny proud of her.  Ahh, she killed someone...that makes sense sicne this is Chicago-inspired. By the way, I'm pretty excited about a Chicago-inspired piece all-together. Killing someone for the sheer excitement of getting the public 'riled' up is completely insane and I love it!

 

This is a great start, I can't wait to read more!

 

-Rumpels

 

[Quadpot | Match One | Theme: Infidelity]

Author's Response:

Hey Rumpels! 

I imagine Azkaban would always be creepy. All of those quandries about characters will develop as the story continues. 

I could definitely see Draco, someone who is raised to be very aware of social perception, pushing his son to walk the straight and narrow. Scorpius isn't exactly a bad guy in this story, but he isn't exactly squeaky clean either.

Lily is going to be quite the dark character in this story. She's definitely inspired by Roxi in Chicago, but she has a few twists of her own. 

Thank you for the lovely review! Hopefully I'll have more coming soon.

~Kaitlin

Name: StarFeather (Anonymous) · Date: 04 Aug 2017 12:58 AM · For: Firestorm

Transferred from hpff back to 15th January 2016:

 

Hi,Kaitlin! Team Red! @Gryffindor Reveiw Battle.

 

I've thought of reading your Christmas story but the title, 'Azkaban' caught my eyes so I stopped by here.

 

I checked the musical, 'Chicago'. The place, Azkaban is on the opposite to the cheerful musical but I think I could capture what you were trying to say. Since I read your other works, I felt it. Kaitlin, your words are all musical. Your fluent wording gave us thrilling and pleasant feeling. I'm jealous. The way that Malfoy entered and his conversation with the workers at Azkaban are all rhythmical.

 

The latter half is a kind of shock to know Lily is a prisoner. You portrayed her as a defiant child against her parents. I wondered what annoyed her the most. Then Scorpius cared her. It's very promising. Will you write about this story more? I'd like to know what will happen to them. The concept of the latter reminded me of the drama on TV centered in the lawyer in my country. (Please don't say it's just one-shot.)

 

Kenny

Author's Response:

Hey Kenny! 

Thank you for transferring this review over. 

Ah. Chicago isn't exactly cheerful. It's about prison and female murderesses. That's why I set the story in Azkaban. 

I'm so glad you liked the wording and the conversation. 

It's not a one-shot! No worries. This will hopefully be between 15-18 chapters once I really get to writing it. I'm slowly working on catching up my WIPs right now, so hopefully I'll be back to posting this one soon.

~Kaitlin

Name: melian (Signed) · Date: 15 Jun 2017 10:20 PM · For: Firestorm

Oh, Kaitlin, this is incredible. I'm going to have to come back and read more when you've got it up, because I'm dying to know where it's going. Of course, seeing as it's based on Chicago I can get some idea, but you know what I mean. Lily Luna Potter acting out to get her parents' attention isn't all that trailblazing, but to have her kill someone and then speak so nonchalantly about it is certainly intriguing. Now I want to know who she killed, how, and why. And how on earth Scorpius Malfoy is going to try to get her off.

 

I liked Antoinette too. Granddaughter of the Macnair who was supposed to decapitate Buckbeak, I assume? She's got a bit of sass - which I would expect, again, given the basis for this story - and seems relatively unaffected by her stay in Azkaban. Naturally the absence of Dementors would help with that - thanks for pointing that out, by the way, as I would probably not have thought of it and wondered why she was so unaffected -but still I think it's probably a feat of endurance and strength of character.

 

I'm curious to see how the prison will affect Lily. Sure, she's convinced she wont' be there for long, but if she is then I imagine it could begin to crush her. I get the idea she's someone who's got away with a lot in the past simply because of who she is, and finding out she can't explain or flirt her way out of this one (which seems to be the case in a way, her bland assumption that Scorpius will get her out) might undo her a little. I'd be very interested to see how you play that.

 

All in all a great start to a story, Kaitilin. Well done!

 

cheers Mel

Author's Response:

Hey Mel! 

I'm so glad you like it! I'll make sure to let you know once I get updating this again. It definitely will follow along the general arch of Chicago, however, I do have a few tricks up my sleeves. I intend for it to be slightly darker as well (if you can make a story about murder darker anyway)

Yay! I'm happy you like sassy Antoinette. There will definitely be more of her as the story continues.

Lily is very much like Roxy. Used to relying on her looks (and in Lily's case, her family's fame). She's in for a really rude awakening.

Thank you for the lovely review! 

~Kaitlin