Name: StarFeather (Anonymous) · Date: 04 Aug 2017 01:06 AM · For: Chapter 1

Transferred from hpff back to 28th January 2016:

 

Hi, Kaitlin! I came here for Gryffindor Review Battle, Team Red!

 

Whenever I come back to your story, I'm full of expectation that you'll have something interesting new world. The expectation was not betrayed. I've never visited France, so I'm looking forward to read what you will write about the country. Aberforth in France! Will he find something warmhearting things there? I hope so. Sicne he suffered the loss of his sister and distrust for his brother, I want him to spend happier life.

 

As always, your writing style is awesome. You spared space for his hollow and painful memories in the past. The tone of your story suits the banner well. What magical adventure is waiting for him? How will he go across to France from Scotland? I guess he will talk to his sister in the portrait when he has unusual experiences. This is a novel, right? I can't wait to see what travel he will go through.

 

Kenny

Name: nott theodore (Signed) · Date: 14 May 2017 04:43 PM · For: Chapter 1

Kaitlin! <3  I'm here to apologise profusely for being a total idiot and also to drop by and leave my 100th review on the archives for you!

 

I love your choice of Aberforth as the main character in this story!  I honestly don't think that I've ever read any stories about him before?  Which, considering how much fic I've read, is pretty impressive.  He only seems to come up as a character in stories focusing on Albus and Gellert, so I'm very excited that you chose him here.

 

I know this was only a short first chapter but your characterisation of Aberforth already seems so great.  I loved the way that you opened this with the internal conflict that he's feeling which will lead up to him going to travel the world and escape from the memories he's left behind.  It's a really clever way of peeling back some of the layers of his character and showing them to the reader.

 

I liked the fact that you included his bravery in this, and the way that he'd chosen to fight in the Battle of Hogwarts eventually, and how he had helped later on.  Then contrasted against that was the bitterness that he still felt towards his brother, because he hadn't forgiven him for Ariana's death and everything that happened in that fateful summer.  The fecat that he was asked to carve Albus's name must have brought that home to him even more; he wanted to be able to respect his brother's memory but there was still conflict there and he couldn't think of Albus as others could.

 

I really liked the way you built up that conflict, too, with the different aspects of the aftermath of the war and the way he can't escape reminders of his brother and everything that's happened.

 

Aberforth's decision to leave and fulfill his early dreams of travelling and exploring the world is very believable.  I don't blame him for wanting to get away from all of this, and I'm looking forward to seeing where you take him on this trip and all the adventures that he's going to have!  I loved the little possessions which you chose to have him take with him, too - they seemed to fit his character very well.

 

Sian :)